ZZZZZZz.....wannabe CSI.

Keep working and maybe you can get a Spike Lee "skolarship"

 

Well, to all who've watched the film, thanks! I also thank all who gave honest critique, good or bad, it's all helpful. And, the Tc does rock! I love drivin' mine!!! Peace.

 

The car looks great on film! The lawyer and the female partner seriously can not act. haha. Sorry, just being honest. The driver of the tC did a better job. But overall, good job!

 

regardless on if it was independent or budget or whatever, any movie has the same core elements. things that move the watcher. And while this movie did have a tC (good for moving) i thought the acting was horrible. the chick investigator chick was hott tho. give her my num, lol.

 

Nice TRD Exhaust.

Good job on the movie, for amateur work it was pretty top notch.

Although a part of me was expecting it to turn into a porno, it just had one of "those" storylines to it.

 

Pretty cool movie. Polish up the writing, eliminate some random scenes which kinda slowed the flow (the side scene where the girl was crossing your driveway seemed out of place) and you're set. As for the acting, the main character guy was pretty good but the others could use some directing. All in all, good flick and loved seeing that tC.

 

2nd. but I do give you props for having the ***** to put it up though. I would redefine your film career and challenge yourself with creativity then the boring NYPD blue meets Law and Order.... All your missing is shakey camera shots....

BTW I went to the School of the Art Instiute of Chicago and studied film. I lived in LA and made my then girlfriend a semi celebrity... Besides film, I've also shot commercials and have been in a few. Here is one I did a few years back. I did the stunt coor. in about 4 hours in the morning and shot it in the afternoon for sony...

http://motozen.net/mpg/768kbps.wmv

I am in black. I have a shaved head now... You might recognize the big korean... He played random task in the first austin powers. Joe Son is a good friend of mine....

It shows. Take your time with film. It will thank you for it. quality is always more important then just shoving something out there.... just to say that you have done somthing. A great treatment is worth more then a rushed film.

 

nice movie man.

 

Honestly, who throws a shoe?

 

i mean...it was ok. good job.

you shoulda hit it in the film. now that woulda been quality.

 

you need to practice what you preach. It is withhold not withold unless you were making up a word combining wit and hold which would be a cool new word.

Spelling is for english class. This is a forum. WGAF if you aren't Mr. Grammer on a forum.... This isn't a properenglish.com forum....

His comments were true and should be swallowed. If you put yourself out there be prepared to bend over. No one likes fake encouragement. Only makes it worse... I.E. ashley simpson... our president... oprah... list goes on and on....

btw this is NOT A FILM. IT IS A VIDEO. Unless you shot it in 8mm, 16mm Bolex, or 35mm ... hell 50mm and A B rolled, cut and spliced REAL film, transfered mag tape, you shouldn't call something that isn't.
Just a little film school pet peeve against digital avid technology. I am old school and sensitive to true film making.

That commercial of mine that was a VIDEO was edited avid and made me cry for betraying the artform... okok enough hehe

 

i agree, you should hit that blonde headed chic, i would tell her to send us some video, ha ha

 

Well, I guess you think Robert Rodriquez isn't a "filmmaker" then. But that is besides the point. I respect your comments, but I must say I wanted to make a mainstream movie. I didn't want the "artsy" weird typical student film that you see ALL THE TIME. I wanted something entertaining and fast paced. I still love the art of filmmaking mind you, but I don't do things for the sake of art, I do what advances the story, and this was the story I wanted to tell. So, anyways, thanks for the comment, and I will take some of it to heart in the next endeaver out to short "videos" I'm still learning. Peace.

 

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Then again, this isn't a critiquemyvideo.com forum either.

 

Spend some more time to come up a story that somehow related to you personal experienced, rather than try to immitate something you saw on TV. Immitate the techniques, don't immitate cheesy dialogues and story lines. I bet the new story you come up will still be "mainstream" but much more interesting and fun to watch. Everything takes time, the longer you spend, the better it come out (with few exceptions.)

 

Fast pace is not a good thing. If you want that, get into commercials, music videos, or industrials. There is no such thing as a typical wierd student film. There is only passion to get an idea out. If you are not open minded and are willing to knock others down, you definitely need to reevaluate your own work. Learn from what you are uncomfortable with and by God I bet you find your nitch.

that is where you are going wrong. there is no such thing as a mainstream movie. artsy works are about personal expression that tends to be unique and full of pain and confused wonderment. This will make a person a film genius. From steven speilberg to M. Night Shyamalan... They are unique in telling a story, and alot of people said to them, when they were starting out young, that they were wierd artsy filmmakers that would never make it. They all had their ups and downs but to imitate greatness is foolish. You just become boring.

You know the 3 acts of a script... You know there are only 5 plots to work with.... man vs. man, man vs. nature, man vs. himself, man vs God, and man vs. the world. Everything that can be expositioned and get out exposition has been done. It is up to you as a filmmaker to find a portal of artsy farty so that it will make you the new standard of what we call mainstream. Take Quentin Tarantino... sure he went to amsterdam and smoked more hash then I could even imagine a person doing to write a script, but boy what a script. If he had your actors doing it, it would of been a terrible joke straight to overseas dvd.

First thing that you should learn right now about doing entertainment is ... get great talent don't ____ it. and never, NEVER star in your own movie. Chose your role and stick with it.

ok I'm done. I had to put up with an eye opening 4 years of my life to learn these things and I thought I'd wake you up. It makes it a whole lot easier.... You have chosen a harsh and evil area to pursue. God be with you.

 

Thank you for your comments, but I humbly disagree with you about pacing. I believe people like fast paced entertainment. Something that is slow and drags along is not what people want to see. IMHO. Thanks again to all who watched the film. And, I am honored that some people have compared it to films in another league outside student films. Have a good day.

 

Thank you for your comments, but I humbly disagree with you about pacing. I believe people like fast paced entertainment. Something that is slow and drags along is not what people want to see. IMHO. Thanks again to all who watched the film. And, I am honored that some people have compared it to films in another league outside student films. Have a good day.

 

Your fast pace story theory sucks. You will make a great fast pace waiter at my table hehe..

There is no such thing as a humble disagreement.

People that like fast pace movies, like action ones from Jerry Bruckheimer, have the talent and the plots to make it happen. They are unique. To a certain crowd. If you haven't noticed, movies these days are not fast pace. People want their monies worth. Movies now a days are pushing 2.5 to 3 hours long!

 

Let me see a short film you've done. I'd like to see what your take is on entertainment. I think fast paced story isn't the point. Fast paced storytelling is.